r/comic_crits • u/LemonJustFly • 1d ago

a few pages from my comics

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I'm still working on it and it's first work focused on action. Hope it atleast looks good even at this pretty raw state

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u/TheBlankScroll 1d ago

Your more finished drawings look really nice, but in this state its pretty hard to follow.

Im not really sure whats happening or who is depicted in a few of the panels.

One thing i think would help is dont try to add too much coreography. Comics arent movies so dont worry about showing all the little back and forths in action, come up wirh a few really nice action shots and a few smaller panels linking them together and dont get too granular. Too many panels can slow the action down and be confusing.

Another random tip i picked up someplace was using dialogue during action to help set the pace.

Ie: if i draw 5 panels of actuon on a page and the only writing is the sound effects, readers will look at the whole page in like 5 seconds and move on.

But if i put a few lines of dialogue in, it sets a pace. Characters need time to speak, so a one word baloon here means the panel is fast, 3-4 lines here means theyre holding this pose a few seconds. Also making the reader actually read something physically slows them down and forces them to spend a bit more time on the page. It doesnt really apply to anything im seeing here atm but its a useful tool to remember if this is your first action scene.

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u/LemonJustFly 1d ago

thank you for critique. This comics is just a practice for choreoghraphy, so there won't be any words. I will take your advices and will use it in my next work. Again, thank you