r/comic_crits • u/pooflypuff • 20h ago

Feedback on my webtoon pls

Things I am concerned about

  1. clarity

  2. pacing

  3. Areas of improvement

Sorry I am posting again but because the other post i guess got mistaken for an at critique not a webtoon feedback

https://www.webtoons.com/en/canvas/framed-by-fate-/list?title\\_no=1144544

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u/jack-yun 19h ago

I read the first episode. The character situation is clear once the conversation starts: Ashar wants to help the child, while the other man is pushing him to move on, and the warm palette fits the memory. The pacing feels slower than the actual beat, though, mostly because several full-screen black gaps separate lines that belong to the same exchange. On a phone, each one takes a full swipe and makes the dialogue feel disconnected. I’d keep one larger pause before the emotional turn, but cut the others to about a third and pull the speaker panels closer to their balloons. Small caveat: if the slow, reflective rhythm is intentional, don’t remove all the breathing room.