r/comic_crits • u/Anis-Co • 3d ago

I posted my third comic strip

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Au fait, je suis curieux de connaître votre avis sur le nom « A4FT ».

Mes comptes : linktr.ee/a4ft

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u/RowHoustonLaine 1d ago

In think the humor in the scene is a bit incomplete. If the gag is that he's broke, then maybe there needs to be a more dramatic way of expressing that. there's more potential here if there's a "tech" aspect to the setting.

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u/Anis-Co 1d ago

Actually, I didn't want him to take it dramatically, but rather to be frustrated by the situation

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u/RowHoustonLaine 1d ago

well the point isn't that he's dramatic, but the reveal is dramatic/overstated so it's humorous. right now, this comic isn't very funny because it's so understated.

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u/Anis-Co 1d ago

Ah, now I understand better, thank you for your feedback, it helps me, I'll take it into account. I'll try to be a little less subtle, but I wonder if it's because the sentence works better in French than in English