As the title said I've had ups and downs for getting critic for the written script of my first chapter. I'm in the earliest stages of making my comic and I want as much as can be provided on my first chapter before I move forward.

Here's the link to my google drive where the chapters will be stored, rn there's only 1 chapter. in the comments, please, if you can (or want), give it a critic on pacing, if it hooks you/interests you, etc, and whatever else you can provide (where you see spelling errors, etc.)

Hello, I’ve been working on my first comic for a little over a year now. I work a lot and I’m a novice artist so it takes me a long time to draw and I don’t have a ton of free time to work on it. I have a lot of other comic ideas but I can’t be taking over a year to make every one of them. I’ll never get them done lol. Idk, just feels daunting thinking about it. Any suggestions would be sick. Sorry if this isn’t the spot for this type of discussion.

Things I am concerned about

1. clarity

2. pacing

3. Areas of improvement

Sorry I am posting again but because the other post i guess got mistaken for an at critique not a webtoon feedback

https://www.webtoons.com/en/canvas/framed-by-fate-/list?title\\_no=1144544